A glass on your front porch, filled with tea, quenched my thirst. Then, a vase converted, holding our love’s first rose. It shattered when you left, becoming the tool that slit my wrists.
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For the weekend Trifextra challenge, we were instructed to choose 1 object, in 33 words (exactly) tell us a story with three different uses for one object.
Obviously, I chose a glass, with a sinister ending (No surprises there, eh?). What did you think? Feel free to share your thoughts in a comment.
Thanks for stopping in!!
08/17/2012 at 1:40 pm
I’ve been writing about breaking up a lot too, the hurt, the slow slide from love into depression or hate etc…this was a perfect ease from one emotion to another.
Great job as always.
08/17/2012 at 1:58 pm
thanks! xoxo
08/13/2012 at 4:22 am
Oh darkly delicious!
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08/13/2012 at 11:00 am
Thank you! its fun to walk on the dark side sometimes.
08/13/2012 at 2:34 am
Oh, wow! I really loved this. Dark and sinister is always entertaining to read (and to write)!
Nicely done.
08/13/2012 at 11:00 am
It’s definitely fun to write! Thanks for reading!
08/12/2012 at 10:29 pm
Love it; You can see the start of the relationship blossom into love and great imagery to show the ending of the relationship…the ending is dark but I like it
08/12/2012 at 10:37 pm
Yes, I tend to write on the dark side quite often. Thank you for stopping in and reading.
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08/12/2012 at 10:16 pm
I didn’t expect the ending at all. With all of these, I start off thinking, Oh, yeah. And then use two comes up and I think, “OK that follows”. And with this one, use three zinged me totally. Completely surprised. Awesome.
08/12/2012 at 10:26 pm
Haha. Thanks!!
08/12/2012 at 6:21 pm
Wowza! I liked the declining feeling of this–great job with the prompt! Thanks for linking up.
08/12/2012 at 6:37 pm
thanks for the fabulous prompt.
08/12/2012 at 9:55 am
Oh Steph…I love your writing, this was fantastic…and haunting..could see the red of the rose and the blood….it turns the colr of tea. Wow!!!!!! Such great images!!! Xo
08/13/2012 at 11:11 am
I’m glad you enjoyed! It’s nice to see you here.
08/12/2012 at 12:34 am
Nicely done. A rather sad ending, but real- sometimes that’s how life is.
08/12/2012 at 1:08 am
Thanks, Janna!
08/11/2012 at 7:19 pm
You took me everywhere in this! Hope and despair especially. Wow.
08/12/2012 at 1:08 am
A journey is what I always intend.
08/11/2012 at 6:46 pm
Well done! I really liked the progression.
The ending was a twist well played.
08/12/2012 at 1:07 am
Thanks, Renee.
08/11/2012 at 6:42 pm
OMG! Gulp! Creative use of the prompt and so visual and visceral. Great writing. Thanks for sharing.
08/12/2012 at 1:07 am
Thanks for reading, Diane!
08/11/2012 at 2:06 pm
This was super inspiring and helped me get to my #3 with the blood tinged water.
08/11/2012 at 2:07 pm
wow!! Now thats an awesome compliment!
08/11/2012 at 2:00 pm
What a way to tell a story in 33 words! Sad–but great–entry.
08/11/2012 at 2:07 pm
Thank you Sandra!
08/11/2012 at 1:08 pm
awesome
You know I love dark and gritty and emo. This was amazing. i didn’t think of it as a twist. I thought it just was gradual decline into nadmess. well done mama
08/11/2012 at 1:14 pm
Yes, that’s exactly it. Thanks for getting it.
08/11/2012 at 1:00 pm
That was a great twist. A nice response
08/11/2012 at 1:15 pm
Thanks. I used to be really good with the unexpected so its refreshing to know I haven’t lost my touch.
08/11/2012 at 11:19 am
Nicely done Sam.
I just wonder if you should switch out “your love’s” with “our love’s”. I think that sounds better and works with how you have referred to the glass initially. Oh and I don’t think you need the comma after “A glass”.
08/11/2012 at 11:26 am
Ohhh! Great suggestion!
08/11/2012 at 10:59 am
What a diverse range of uses for your item. I didn’t expect that twist at the end either.
08/11/2012 at 11:14 am
but is the story clear?
08/11/2012 at 11:39 am
Oh yes! It was a very creative. I liked that in the end, the glass was altered, like the character.
08/11/2012 at 11:40 am
Thank you!
08/11/2012 at 9:02 am
Wow! Major u-turn on this. Well written poem.
08/11/2012 at 11:15 am
I’m glad it worked. Thanks for stopping in again.
08/11/2012 at 3:47 am
Oh my! I was not expecting that ending. Great job of throwing in the unexpected.
08/11/2012 at 3:49 am
Thanks!!