Four-letter Words

Photo courtesy of Cheri Lucas.

She said she loved the train. In the next breath, she said she loved me. Odd that we were on the wrong side of the train to catch it. If she really loved the train, she would have made sure we were on the right side, but we weren’t.

Look. I’m getting repetitious already.

She had that effect on me. Momma always said to be careful with the four-letter words. Use them to make an impact she would say. Corrine used four-letter words a lot.

I don’t think she always meant them.

Momma would say she was bad but I couldn’t help having feelings for her. She was pretty, though some might say she was a bit on the plain side. Besides her bad habit of using four-letter words, she was nice enough. She liked helping other people. She’d helped that old couple by the train get across the tracks.

She said she loved the train.

Why didn’t she stay on the right side to catch it? Why were we standing here on the slippery cobblestone embracing? Didn’t she realize her weight pulled me forward, making balance quite the task?

Love.

She loved the train. She loved me. Which is true, which is false? Are neither true? Could both be false? Momma always said to be careful with four-letter words. Use them to make an impact, she would say. Corrine used four-letter words a lot.

I don’t think she always meant them.

Momma says people who waste four-letter words are bad. Not worth the ground they walk on, she would say. The ground was so slick.

Letting go was the easy part.

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For the Scriptic prompt exchange this week, Michael gave me this prompt: “People say they love a lot of things, but they really don’t. It’s just a word that’s been overused.” -Bob Dylan

I gave Katri this prompt: headache, shoes, season, an hour, and a garden.

I am also linking this up to wordpress’s weekly writing prompt. This week we were given the picture above as our inspiration.

As always I welcome honest feedback. Please feel free to share your thoughts in a comment.

Thanks for stopping in!

 

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112 thoughts on “Four-letter Words

  1. I do not know if it’s just me or if perhaps everyone else encountering problems with your blog. It appears as though some of the written text in your content are running off the screen. Can someone else please comment and let me know if this is happening to them too? This could be a issue with my browser because I’ve had this happen before.
    Cheers

  2. I don’t know where you heard that from but honestly my mother actually always told me to be careful with the “four-letter words”- love or hate. And today when I look at all the young people who just started going out together, using the words “love you” over frequently, the words seem to lose their meaning and significance. I would really like to reblog this and also share it on twitter. Can I, if it’s ok with you?

    • Love/hate weren’t included in the list of 4 letter words we weren’t allowed to say growing up, but they are, in fact, 4 letter words, and they are both overused.. I would love if you tweeted the link to my story, and since you were kind enough to ask about rebloggiing, I’m okay with that too. Thank you for enjoying my story so much you want to share it.

  3. Thank you for this well written story. I like that you describe the awkwardness of getting off balance while embracing – I have never heard anyone talk about this before.

  4. This post is really beautiful. You wrote almost poetically and utilized repetition, which I loved. Your mom seems like a wise woman, we all need to be careful with our “four letter words”.

    • Thank for liking it enough to reblog it. I’ma bit touchy about reblogging (not a fan). I love that you think my work is worth sharing, I’d just prefer to be asked next time, please? Thanks.:) Thanks for stopping in and taking time to leave me a comment.

  5. Poignant little piece here, and I liked the use of repetition (hardly see that anymore). Definitely could be used in a shortfilm.

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  7. Love the play btw the 4 letter words concepts. Also love the male perspective. The only aspect that seemed contrived was the “Why isn’t she on the right side to catch the train?”… it doesn’t lay naturally with the rest of the situation. I mean that as constructive criticism, not standing judgement. I LOVE the prompts… I’ll need to look into Scriptic and the weekly writing prompt (even if it’s just for my own personal writing log and not a post or anything). Thanks!

  8. My mom always said what I should or should not do, well I will say yes to her minds, but doing on the “no” side. Finally, my mother had no idea on me! Should I feel lucky to get rid of mom’s protection or not?

  9. Momma says people who waste four-letter words are bad. Not worth the ground they walk on, she would say. The ground was so slick. Momma isn’t always right, right?

  10. Great writing. I ‘love’ the train too and I ‘love’ your story. I ‘mean’ it. I guess I use four letter words a lot too :)
    Congratulations on being Freshly Pressed.

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  12. He doesn’t quite sound like the kind of guy I’d picture traveling to little known European hamlets ;) A bit of a homebody, a momma’s boy of sorts. Simple

    Perhaps she sees him as a project.

  13. It has been a while. You are getting good. Very good. :D What you put out and what you held back made it fun and interesting to think about. Very nice, SAM…

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