It’s been a while since I visited Viola and my In Time series which first appeared on My Write Side. You can find more by click the WIP tab above or searching for “In Time.”
Viola stood with her feet shoulder width apart on the ground. Her arms extended forward from her body and the fingers of both hands curled around a pistol. Her tear smudged face was the only indicator of her fear as Father Lee stood before her, weaponless. She’d stripped him of his own pistol, which she’d now pointed at his heart.
“If you kill me, you will never save him,” Father Lee pleaded.
“I’ll drag you back from the pits of hell.” Venom dripped from her tongue.
“Roderick will destroy you.”
“Wicked words from a dying man. I won’t back down.”
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I’m linking this up with Lance and Leeroy for the 100 Word Song challenge. This week’s song was one of my favorites, from Tom Petty: “I Won’t Back Down.” Since Viola is also in survival mode here, I’m linking this up with Velvet Verbosity, too, since it meets her 100 Word Challenge requirement. The prompt there this week was “Surviving”.
I welcome and appreciate honest feedback. Please share your thoughts in a comment.
Thanks for stopping in!
02/25/2013 at 11:02 pm
This was great! I know you were trying to make it exactly 100 words, but if you edit this into something else in future I would take out the, “venom dripped from her tongue” and simplify it to something like, “she spat”.
02/26/2013 at 3:30 am
Yes, that is simpler, isn’t it. I do tend sometimes to get purple where purple isn’t needed. Thanks!
02/24/2013 at 8:11 pm
Very good! This fits the song perfectly.
02/24/2013 at 10:34 pm
Thanks, Deana!
02/23/2013 at 2:17 pm
This song is fitting in so well with so many stories. This is gritty and real. The emotions are powerful. So much story in a mere 100 words.
02/23/2013 at 2:38 pm
THanks, Deb
02/21/2013 at 7:19 pm
Nice way to use both prompts.
02/22/2013 at 1:30 am
thanks, bee
02/21/2013 at 6:59 pm
Perfect song for the perfect story for the perfect interpretation. Welcome back Viola and Viola’s mama! Thank you
02/22/2013 at 1:29 am
thank you!! viola needed a spark.
02/21/2013 at 6:50 pm
wicked words from a wicked man . . . well said!
02/22/2013 at 1:26 am
thanks!
02/21/2013 at 2:26 pm
that last line, those are the kind of words, I have to hurry to type, so I don’t lose them.
it was a perfect way to use that quip.
02/22/2013 at 1:23 am
thanks!
02/21/2013 at 2:21 pm
Ahh, Viola. If any character fits the “won’t back down” mentality, she does
02/22/2013 at 1:23 am
she is my strongest female character to date, isnt she?