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The Elven Games (6)

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The path through the woods was narrow but that didn’t bother Edgar. Tribba, a short and stout dwarf, managed well enough, and the scenery was stunningly beautiful. Birds of all colors flitted from emerald clothed branches. An emerald carpet lay on one side of the path, covered with a thin coat of dried leaves from last autumn. The wood grew noisier the further they walked. He heard magpies crying, nightingales singing, and the call of the hawk as it soared overhead. Fleeting glimpses of red fawns appeared here and there, and a group of young bucks drinking at the silver stream on the other side of the path stole his breath. They lifted their heads in unison as he gasped and eyed him curiously before dashing back into the woods behind them.

“It is so peaceful here,” Edgar said.

“Yes,” Tribba answered. “The fairies protect it.”

The path suddenly curved away from the stream, leading further into the woods. The trees clustered closer together, but the light still filtered in despite the emerald canopy. Squirrels ran up and down the tree trunks, chattering constantly as they passed. Tribba answered them occasionally and it amazed Edgar every time he saw one scamper away as if it understood.

“You can talk to squirrels?”

“Well, it’s like talking to a baby. I just repeat the sounds they make. They seem to like it.”

Edgar smiled. “Every moment I spend with you makes me question why you need a champion at all! With your home and land at stake, you are more than able to do this challenge on your own!”

“Tsk.” Tribba said. “No, I am no match for those elves. I have no athletic skill. I’m not a druid. I’ve never practiced the arts. I have nothing to offer in a game. But, you, Edgar, you are everything I am not. I believe in you.”

They stopped walking. They were standing in a circular opening with trees surrounding them. Grass as tall as Edgar’s knees swallowed Tribba whole. Only the tip of her bright pink hat stood above the blades. Edgar turned slowly to take in his surroundings. Tribba hastily patted him.

“What?” he asked.

“Oh! There you are. Don’t do that! That diet of peanut butter and wafers you’ve lived on has left you so skinny you completely disappear when you turn like that!” Tribba said. “I need to fatten you up before the games officially begin!”

Edgar’s brows furrowed in confusion.

“I’m sorry. I thought I’d lost you for a moment, and even though these woods seem peaceful now, at night it’s a hazardous place to be. Not even the fairies can help you at night when the werewolves run the woods.” Her face was serious as she talked and Edgar shuddered. “This is where I wanted to bring you.”

Tribba pointed to a small patch of flowers in the center of the circle. The grass thinned until it faded into the flowers. Tribba laid down, her back facing the sky, and instructed Edgar to do the same.

“Look!” She said in a soft whisper. His eyes followed her pointing finger. A smile creased his face as he saw the fairies. Their little bodies danced lithely. A soft buttery glow shadowed them. They, like the flowers, were clothed in the rich colors of the rainbow. Their hair flowed upward, adding height, in the same shade as their clothing. Tiny voices tinkling like bells emerged from the bed. Tribba slid her eyes in Edgar’s direction before stretching one hand into the bed. Fairies stopped dancing and disappeared within toadstools Edgar’s eyes had not seen the first time.

“Syra!” Tribba called. “Malachi! Come forth!”

Two little fairies peeked from their mushrooms. Tribba smiled in greeting and they emerged eagerly into the bed.

“Ah, my friends, it’s been a while, eh?” Tribba said. She stretched her hand out and both fairies climbed aboard. Tribba stood and Edgar got a closer look. A ruby clad arm extended and a little finger pointed at Edgar. “This is Edgar. He is my champion.”

Two little bodies eyed the slender frame of a boy in front of them and doubled over laughing on Tribba’s palm. Sapphire motions filled the air as a grand gesture of wiping tears from his eyes was acted out by Malachi.

Edgar was disgruntled. “Thanks for the vote of confidence,” he said. The ruby fairy’s wings fluttered and she rose to Edgar’s nose and patted him gently on it.

“He is more than he looks, but he needs help. That’s why I’m here.”

Tribba and Edgar explained the story of Edgar’s lost magic. The fairies laughed again, as if the idea of losing magic was preposterous, but agreed to help as much as they could. Diamonds filled the air and a small pouch appeared in Tribba’s other hand. She opened it and scooped up as many diamonds as she could before pulling the drawstring closed. She held it out to Edgar, who accepted it.

“Fairy dust…” is all she said as he put the pouch around his neck. “It will help your magic. No one has greater magic than the fairies. Not even the elves.”

Tribba chatted with the fairies for a little longer before releasing them back into the flowerbed. Glitter decorated each cheek when she rose and she laughed.

“There’s nothing in this world like fairy kisses,” she said. She read the confused expression on Edgar’s face and continued. “You don’t know what you’re missing until you experience one, so don’t fret. It’s unbecoming of a champion.”

A sharp crack shook the forest and Tribba looked at the sky. Grey clouds had rolled in and hidden the sun. Lightning flashed between two tall trees.

“We must hurry! We don’t want to be stuck in these woods after dark!”

Edgar looked confused again, but followed Tribba without question. He was a stranger to this part of the world after all. A howl sounded from somewhere behind him, sharp and shrill. Goosebumps covered his flesh and the hair of his arms stood at attention.

“What was that?” he asked.

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For the Scriptic prompt exchange this week, kgwaite gave me this prompt: A diet of peanut butter and Ritz crackers.

I gave Jordan this prompt: It was a calm and peaceful night. Snow fell from the sky and carolers made joyful noise as they moved from house to house. It was like a picture on a Christmas card, only the inside message held a sinister surprise…

The picture at the top of this piece is the picture prompt from Picture It and Write this week.

I welcome and appreciate honest feedback on all my writing. Please share your thoughts on this piece in a comment.

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Author: SAM

Author of fictions, SAM spends much of her free time living in alternate universes created by her own mind or others. When she's not writing, she mothers her 4 children, loves her husband, attends church, and neglects housework as often as possible.

19 thoughts on “The Elven Games (6)

  1. The use of precious gem terminology did wonders for the setting of the scene, adding to the stigma of the importance of fairies.

    I agree with previous posts regarding Edgar’s comparative height to Tribba. Though I felt his not being classified by race meant he was human, the sense of how he could fit in Tribba’s and Larss’ home took somewhat of a hit with this scene.

    The joys of an extended story is the keeping of consistency, when there are so many small details to keep in mind.

    A small quibble to an increasingly interesting tale. Keep up the good work =)

  2. Hi SAM,
    I am still catching up on the blogs I follow.
    I enjoyed this, as usual.

    A question-ish: “Grass as tall as Edgar’s knees swallowed Tribba whole.”
    The height difference is that much? I’m not sure that impression has been created in the story so far.

  3. I agree with the comments on your descriptions. It was kind of weird at first reading about the woods under a picture of the diamonds, but you tied that in with the fairy dust. I enjoy the characters, but I went back to the beginning and I still feel like I don’t really know them. I guess I’ll have to keep reading. It was difficult to read the other parts by scrolling, by the way. Tagging them all with “Elven Games” would be helpful.

  4. Ooo, I love how the tiny diamonds were fairy dust. That was very creative! Thanks for contributing this week, Sam! :)

    - Ermisenda

  5. I’m loving this story, great characters and the plot is compelling.

  6. Well, being late to the party, everyone said what I wanted to. :D Another great installment SAM.

    • Thanks, Eric. I’m really having fun with this, so I’m letting it flow instead of trying to get to the ending like. Usually do with my serials. At least this one is in order!

  7. I like this peek into the fantasy world. You’ve really expanded the visuals of Tribba’s home.

    I had some of the same issues as stankmeaner. There was some repetition with language that if fixed would make the piece much more vibrant

  8. I think this might be the best installment of the Elven Games so far. Your descriptions are vivid and imaginative. I love reading these and look forward to your next one!

  9. I love the color palette in this story, it makes everything feel jewel toned and magical; emerald and ruby are so much more evocative than just red and green. I think this is my favorite installment so far, well written and teases out the plot line in a way that makes you excited to find out just what exactly it is that a fairy kiss feels like ;) the only thing i have ever found in your writing that sometimes makes me say ‘huh…’ is occasional word repetition too close together – Tribba pointed to a small patch of flowers in the center of the circle. The grass thinned until it faded into the flowers, or like bells emerged from the bed. Tribba slid her eyes in Edgar’s direction before stretching one hand into the bed. It could totally just be how i read things, but the flower/flower and bed/bed so close together kind of clang in my head. Minor details only…

    • And as I read through I see where I can add in more jewel tones here and more descriptive color there. I’ll see what I can do about the flower/flower bed/bed thing

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