This follows immediately after this: A Moment in Time
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“You loved me once. You could let me go.” Viola pleaded, her steel facade melting as she spoke.
“I no longer have a heart. I have the scars to prove it,” the Time Keeper said, holding his pistol firm.
She hissed, “You think I don’t? I have to live forever remembering what I did to you.”
“I would’ve moved the earth for you! Now I’m stuck here, less of a man, heartless, between worlds, forever.”
Viola stepped closer and kissed his lips. A single shot was fired and she slumped to the ground.
“It doesn’t have to be like this.”
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This week’s 100 W0rd Song was Swing Life Away by Rise Against (my stepson’s favorite band). This is my interpretation of it.
I welcome constructive criticism. Feel free to share your thoughts in a comment.
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08/15/2012 at 9:30 am
Damn. That second to-last line punched me.
08/15/2012 at 11:25 am
Sorry that it “got” you. It wasn’t meant to be sweet and pretty.
08/12/2012 at 10:50 pm
There’s a Pink Floyd song “Why don’t you talk to me” (or something like that) with a similar lyric to that last line. I imagine them repeating this scene over and over in a horrible time loop.
08/12/2012 at 11:40 pm
Oh that would be interesting.
08/10/2012 at 3:22 pm
You painted a very vivid picture with just 100 words! Wow!
I am also intrigued and would like to read more.
08/10/2012 at 6:18 pm
WOW!! Thanks for the compliment!
08/09/2012 at 3:51 pm
So much going on here and I am hooked. Tight dialog and swirling emotions, doesn’t get much better.
08/09/2012 at 9:30 pm
wow! thanks tara!
08/09/2012 at 2:46 pm
I’m not sure who said the last line…I assume Cage but…it doesn’t quite fit coming from him, assuming he just shot her.
08/09/2012 at 9:29 pm
its open ended on purpose so i have some wiggle room to write with.
08/09/2012 at 8:38 am
Ok, first, the 100 words? Love it! The TimeKeeper and Viola both saying, “It doesn’t have to be like this.” I love even more. (See? I went and read the other parts)
08/09/2012 at 12:56 pm
lol. you are awesome to read the preceding piece.
Thank you, Eric for your words,
08/08/2012 at 11:17 pm
Treacherous beginning to what feels like it could be a much larger story. You have my attention!
08/08/2012 at 11:27 pm
Oh! Thank you!