Of lamb chops and mutton he ate his fill, his lips smacking in delight. He still couldn’t believe his luck. No farmers came chasing with pitchforks and guns. All because the boy lied.
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For the weekend those devious minds behind Trifecta decided that for this Trifextra challenge, we were to stand on the shoulders of giants and rewrite a story in exactly 33 words.
I welcome and appreciate feedback. Even when I write something short like this, there’s always room for improvement. Please, feel free to share your thoughts.
Thanks for stopping by!
03/13/2012 at 4:55 pm
Brilliant!!!!! This was jusr perfect!
02/20/2012 at 12:28 pm
Thanks for joining up again, SAM. This was really well crafted, building up to a very clever last line. Great job! Join us for next our weekday challenge.
02/20/2012 at 2:09 pm
This one was really fun. Thanks for hosting it.
02/20/2012 at 9:53 am
This is cute Sam
02/19/2012 at 6:17 pm
I love it! I love it! I love it!
I could picture him there, thoroughly satisfied with his craftiness and belly full.
02/19/2012 at 6:28 pm
He is a smug and content little wolf.
02/19/2012 at 6:14 pm
Totally fits the devious nature of a wolf
02/19/2012 at 6:16 pm
They are devious creatures, aren’t they?
02/19/2012 at 5:41 pm
Ha! I love it! I most definitely need to make sure my almost 10yo son never sees this version.
02/19/2012 at 5:47 pm
haaha. yes.
02/19/2012 at 4:39 pm
that big, bad wolf!!!!
delightfully retold – shiver
02/19/2012 at 5:47 pm
Thank you, barbara!
02/19/2012 at 4:01 pm
I love it! A refreshing retelling. I especially love the line “lips smacking in delight.” Delicious!
02/19/2012 at 4:03 pm
Thank you. the story is sinister enough on its own that it didnt need a new ending.
02/19/2012 at 3:58 pm
The last line makes the whole thing. Succint and surprising. I like it.
02/19/2012 at 4:02 pm
HAHA. Thanks, Lance.